“I should have never let pop sell the farm”.
“He was getting to old for it” his wife reassured him.
John didn’t see it that way. He stared at the old neglected truck, a tear rolled down his cheek. It looked lonely, useless now, rusting away behind the fence.
“That was one tough truck, not like they make em’ today. There was nothing to break…I bet we could fire that workhorse up. It worked right till its last day.”
“Do you wanna go?” his wife asked.
John didn’t want to go.
“What time are visiting hours at the nursing home?”
This was a sad story as well. Very well told. I enjoyed it.
Here’s mine:
http://sarahthestoryteller.wordpress.com
Thank you Sarah!
Good story with a lot of universal issues packed into 100 words. (I also deal with aging in mine) Here’s it is: http://postcardfiction.com/2012/03/30/truth-and-beauty/
Thanks Janet!
Sad, for sure. I liked the way the husband/son character hid his emotions behind the truck story.
If you are open to critique though, you’ve repeated “behind/outside the fence” in that one paragraph. Maybe one of those could be deleted and the three loose words used somewhere else.
Great point….I’ll work on changing that. Thanks man!
I changed it around, not sure if that’s better but it’s a hundred words.
Sad but real. I really liked all of the content. Words that come to mind: bittersweet, real, knowing. Good work.
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Kris @ Integrative Thought
Thanks Kris. Very kind of you to say!
Bittersweet. Such a realistic portrayal of the sadness of growing old. Nicely written.
Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.htm.
Thanks. I found it bittersweet as well and not outright sad!
A tough truck and a tough story. You’re right, he never should have let him sell the farm.
Tough to read?
Very bittersweet and sentimental. They really don’t make anything the way they used to. Here’s mine: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/03/flash-fiction-grand-dads-truck.html
It is an interesting piece. Portraying a situation that many can symphatise with. Letting go of the past can be hard too.
Here is the link to mine:
http://366degree.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/forget-him-not/
Cheers!
Thank you!
Sad! Lots of tales that yank at the heartstrings. Beautiful telling.
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/03/28/state-pride/
Thank you CC. Loved your take on it! Really well done! Thanks for stopping by.
I always hate letting go of things I loved when they’re past useful, but I think that old truck could still be used too, lol. Great story, Tom.
First let me say THANKS Madison for letting us all have fun on your page. I collect all kinds of old stuff I have chairs that date back over a hundred years, tables etc… Love old rusty things! Thanks for the kind words, the fun prompts and for stopping by.
Tom
Hi Tom: I liked the comparison betw. the old truck and the person in the nursing home. My story touches on that theme as well. Nice work. Here’s mine:
http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com
Thank you Lora! I will check your post out! See you on your blog soon.
Thanks Tom
A very well done piece. We all walk down that path and struggle in vain against that bastard entropy. I was reminded of my father by your tale. I hope they go back and get that truck running again.
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/03/30/pure-coincidence/
Thanks Doug. I really enjoyed your piece as well. You are one hell of a writer! Kind words from you go a long way!
Thanks Tom
Fire that sucker up and go into town to see him. You won’t be sorry.
Maybe I’ll use a little moonshine! Thanks for stopping by Ruth!