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His teacher warned me.
“Ira, you should apologize to Hannah for pushing her off the rocking horse.”
“No.”
“Why?”
“It’s my horsey”
“It’s for the class to share.”
“It’s my horsey.”
He went to his room after “timeout” without even a whisper. After a little while, I went in to check on him.
“Are you ready to say sorry?”
“No.”
I turned to leave his room then stopped dead in my tracks.
“What’s this?”
“I was talking to Grandpa, in heaven.”
“What did he say?”
“He likes my horsey.”
“Would you share it with grandpa?”
“Silly, he knows it mine.”
You ask and you get the answer -lively dialogue!
Hey Pirate,
Good seeing you here. Kids are what they are and sometimes no matter how hard you try they are just not going to change…
Thanks,
Tom
Well, that was believable… Nice response to the prompt, Tom.
Ted,
I added the word heaven but now I am one word over…perhaps it is believable now?
Tom
Ha….I took out dead…100 words!
Ha ha…took out “when I” added “then” and “dead”….still 100 words!
It’s okay. Heaven implies dead, right?
I didn’t have the word heaven in there at first…
Wow, very Dark Shadows here. Nice take on the prompt.
The Dark one has come….ohhhhh NO!
More like the Twilight Zone where Billy Mumy played a child who had conversations on a toy phone with his dead grandmother.
I do not remember that episode…I will have to watch for it the next time there is a TZ marathon on TV.
Definitely should, Tom. It was one of TZ’s best IMHO.
I think I will stranger!
Love this story. Kids can sure be stubborn and headstrong at times! I like the way this conversation unfolded with calling grandpa in heaven.
Muzer,
Thanks…I saw that picture with the phone near mouth and the crayons and I couldn’t help but approach this from a child’s mind…since I have a child’s mind it wasn’t a stretch.
Tom
That’s just what grandpop would do — back up the kid. And who’s going to argue with him? Nice job here, again great use of dialogue!
Perry,
It’s a Grand-pop’s duty to back up the kids. Thanks for the comments and the kind words.
Tom
LOLLLLLL!!!
Very good dialogue!
Abraham,
Thanks for the comments and for taking the time out to reading The Crew and Morning Sunshine. It really means a great deal to me. Thanks again.
Tom
I wish the Grandpa had insisted on a turn on the horsey. That would have freaked out the teacher. 🙂
David,
LoL….that would have been a fun twist.
Thanks,
Tom
Never try to reason with a child; they’ve always got the inside track. Great one!
Sandra,
Ain’t that the truth…Thanks for the kind words.
Tom
Reminds me of conversations with our girls when they were little. You brought him to life.
janet
Janet,
Thank you…I like that!
Tom
Yes! I hope the kid gets his horsey! And the logic behind a kid … priceless! Awesome, Tom!
Kent,
I will take awesome and priceless any day of the week…Thank you!
Tom
Sounds like conversations with my kid. LOL. Love this. Grandpa’s a smart guy and knows not to push a kid into sharing something they don’t want to.
Debra,
The thing about being a Grandpa is you don’t have to…it’s not your job, you just hand those kiddies right back to the parents. Thanks for the kind words!
Tom
Dear Tom,
I take it “What’s this?” referred to the phone? I was momentarily confused, however I love the dialogue. You’ve captured that childish/childlike logic. I predict that Ira’s either going to be a salesman, a gangster or a lawyer. (hmmm…they might all be the same thing).
Shalom,
Rochelle
Oddly I was referring to the whole picture (still life) like a shrine of some sort…figuring it was the prompt this week I didn’t think “What this?” was a huge stretch of the imagination for people….Thanks for commenting.
Tom
I was thinking more along the line of manager or business owner but same thing…just an acceptable to thief. Glad you you loved the dialogue.
Troy
You certainly caught a stage of childhood here…the child is so real– and reasonable in his own mind!
Claudia,
Thank you…reasonable enough for a child.
Tom
oh my gosh, we seemed to be on the same wavelength! great take on the prompt.
I will have to check yours out….
Thanks.
Tom
Hi Tom,
I think you’ve read The Rocking Horse Winner too many times and it’s stuck in your brain! Either that or you’re eating too much matzo ball soup! Ron
Ron,
I forgot all about that story…It has to be the soup!
Tom
Sometimes kids can be brutally honest. Liked this one a lot. It’s his horsey!
Thank you JACKIE PPPPP. I love the brutal honesty of children, we can learn so much from them.
Tom
I love honesty. Yes we can learn from kids in that regard.
Honesty is a tough game…you have to be willing to pay the price! But I love it.
What an impressive and totally beleivable dialog. Funny 🙂
Thank you Brudberg. I have to say your story left my head spinning. Great work!
Tom
Awww…children. Bless his heart…and i bet grandpa understands it’s his and wouldn’t mind if he doesn’t share…other children however a different story. Very well done…i deal with share and don’t share all day lol.
Boomie,
To share or not to share that is the question…Thanks for the kind comment.
Tom
Brought a smile to my face…mysterious but innocent. Sharing can be one of the hardest skill to for a child or some adults.
Anonymous,
Just like your comment…mysterious but innocent…Glad I made you smile.
Tom
I love Ira’s voice – such a strong character. Great last line.
Sarah,
Thank you kindly…a strong character with strong character…Thank you so much, glad you loved his voice.
Tom
Oh, child logic 🙂 I like the dialog.
Thank you Sharon.
I read this so early on that I forgot you’d posted, per my comment on Rocelle’s site. My bad. 🙂
Janet
Looks like we missed each other….
A forgotten story…how sad. I almost feel bad!
that’s a kid who just sees things differently than the rest of us. in more ways than one. well done.
Rich,
That was what I was going for…Not a spooky Twilight Zone episode just a kid with an imagination and a stubborn personality…Glad you picked up on it.
Tom
What kid doesn’t want a horsey of their own. My boss has an old one in his workshop that needs repairing and I still want it. Guess I’m still a kid at heart. Love the matter of fact communication with Grandpa.
Anne,
I hear ya on that..what kid doesn’t want a horsey of their own. We both must be kids at heart cause I want one to..Thanks for the kind words.
Tom
The child has his own reasons. An enjoyable conversation..and a unique take on the prompt
Thank you. I am glad you found the conversation enjoyable.
Tom