I would like to thank our lovely host Rochelle. All other stories can be found here. The picture, photo and sculpture all done by the extremely talented Claire Fuller.
Not a big fan of the 300 word introduction to the one hundred word story… I totally understand if you skip ahead to my 100 word offering.
This story is nonfiction and is based on the love of my life, my girlfriend Sabrina. I had a tough week because I lost a close friend. Half numb, slightly hung over and tired from sleep deprived nights I didn’t think I would participate this week but my addictive personality got the best of me. As hard as I tried I could not shake this monkey on my back known as the Friday Fictioneers. I also apologize for my lack of commenting last week.
When I look at the picture with the statue in it, it reminds me of two people so close they are one, intermingled in thought and emotion. Eyes closed, warmth surrounding them, feeling the wave of their love flowing through each other. That is how I feel with Sabrina. During a dark week she was my light, and I had no choice but to make her the subject of this weeks prompt.
100 words
On the bed with my legs over yours we lie back as I read to you. The sun comes through the window, we are nude and fit together as we adjust for position. Normally uncomfortable naked with the blinds open I am the statue of the Dying Gaul in your mind and I can feel your eyes as I can feel the morning light coming through the windows. I put the book down, curl around you and whisper without need for restraint thoughts I normally do not share. I breathe in the scent of the only woman I love.
The Dying Gaul
Bri and Me
Good writer. Lucky man.
Your work this week is powerful and moving. I’m glad you wrote the long intro, but with or without it, your 100 words soar.
Peace,
Doug
Doug,
It is good to see you back at the top of my comment list. I hope your disc tournament went well. Thanks for taking the time out to read and for your kind comments.
Peace,
Tom
So honest, pure, moving and well written .. Your emotions came out in this piece.
Sorry to hear about your friend.. Heartfelt condolences and may God give you all the strength to get through this rough time.
Muzer,
Thank you for your condolences and for your comments. I will be by your blog sometime within the next day or so to comment and read. I am busy this week and time is limited.
Thanks,
Tom
Beautifully done. Sorry for your loss but you’re going the right way about coping with it. You sound just right for each other.
Sandra,
We are just right for each other. I love her with all my heart and she always been nothing less then understanding of me. Coping with loss comes in many forms and for me writing has always been my therapy. Thanks for commenting and for your support.
Tom
Dear Tom,
It’s the stories that emanate from the depths that touch others. You’ve done that this week, my friend. My thoughts are with you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Rochelle,
Thank you for the comment, as well as chatting with me this week. Sometimes it is best just to let things out…But I noticed a few typos in my intro and I am little baffled that you did not say something…Do not go soft on me my friend. Tough times or not your editing skills are needed by this lazy writer.
Tom
Okay, Tom, your call…I did find two typos in the story…didn’t notice them in the intro. (Pobody’s nerfect) I think you mean “statue” and not “statute” of the Dying Gaul…
And it should be “I breathe in…” Breath is the noun.
There. Ya happy? You nailed me. I did kind of overlook them. I won’t let it happen again. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
Rochelle,
I knew there were some mistakes in there…It was a long day! I knew I could count on you and Yes I am happy now!
Tom
A very beautiful piece Tom. And your description of my sculpture is just how I see it too.
Claire,
That is the comment I wanted to hear from you. Great work. Thank you!
Tom
This is so beautiful…heartfelt, honest and raw. Very well done. So sorry about your loss…sending kind thoughts. Stay strong
Boomie,
Thank you very much for commenting and for your encouraging words. Staying strong….
Tom
the emotion in this piece is so real it embraces this reader. Please share this with your Bri. She will want to frame your words.
Thank you so much…I shared it with Bri as I wrote it…There is another poem about her on webpage http://www.tompoet.com called my water. It will be published this summer in a magazine. I will frame that one for sure and give it to her.
Thanks Tom
What a beautiful tribute to your love. I am sorry for your loss.
Deana,
Thanks all the way around.
Tom
Agree that it’s a lovely tribute. I’m glad she was there for you during such a difficult time. I love the reading to her. Reading aloud is wonderful at any age.
Just one grammar item–“we lie back” not “lay.” 🙂
Praying the upcoming days will bring sunshine into your life again!
janet
Ohhhh Janet!
Lay… Lie! Aahhhh crap!Thanks!
Tom
OK OK I fixed it….I love reading to her and I do it when I ever I can. I was reading Leaves of Grass to her a few nights ago. I am looking forward to some sunshine myself…All the best to you Janet!
Tom
So sorry for you loss. I’m glad you have someone to support you through it. Your story was, as someone said, raw and honest and beautiful.
Thank you kindly… She is my water and we both feel as if we have met in another time…perhaps we did and we will continue to..It’s a nice thought..
Tom
true love never grows old. Thanks for sharing this.
Beautiful!
Thank you.
You are welcome.
Beautiful and emotional. You describe the intimacy of love so well. I love the line about feeling her eyes on you. I could read this over and over again.
Thank you. Please do read it over and over again!
Tom
Sorry for the loss of your friend. It was a very touching story. True love is a precious thing.
Thank you. True love is a precious thing worthy of words on paper, whispers of truth and expressions of raw feelings.
Tom
sorry for the loss of your friend. Good that you are having support to cope with your feelings..Few people fiind a true soulmate..and your story also reflects your thoughts..
Thanks for the support…You know I feel blessed everyday we are with each other. She is truly my soulmate.
Tom
Perfect and pure – a beautiful piece Tom.
Peace to you and your friend’s family.
Thanks T….That is a fine thing to say…I do not know if there will be much peace for my friends family for a long time but let’s hope.
Tom
Beautifully done! Great parallel with the prompt and the picture of the real thing.
Perry,
Thank you Perry.
Tom
i’m sorry to hear of your loss.. that’s beautiful writing. very deep and powerful.
Thank you Kz
Tom
Lovely story. Lovely relationship! Very sorry to read of the loss of your friend. Be nice to yourself. Ann
Ann,
I will try my best to be nice to myself and others….Thank you.
Tom
Hi Tom,
Wow, beautifully strung words. Ron
Thanks ron.
What a sweet story.
In the darkness we find the light…
Tom
Lucky in love makes nothing else matter.
Well lucky in love sure helps to ease the pain that life will hand out…
Tom
So glad you had her to help you in this dark time. The one that makes us whole helps to share the burden and multiply the happiness. I like your description and comparison to the sculture. I got the same kind of feeling from the picture.
Thank you Joe. “The one that makes us whole helps to share the burden and multiply the happiness”….well said.
Tom
I’m sure Sabrina appreciates this story – as you say, the two faces appear to be melded by their love, just as you are. I think there’s a typo in the last line – the is repeated.
Jen,
That’s odd…maybe it happened with an update…I will have to look into that. Thanks…
Tom
Turns out it has been there the whole time….
I set out into mine with the desire to get a feel into the language for that nuzzled nearness the sculpture evokes. Your combo of support and nourishment, and of whispering and breathing did it. Glad you got it off your back.
Thanks, I am working on getting the rest off of my chest but for now I am wearing it like a cross and have been unable to put it down on the end table.
Sensitive tribute written from the heart–very well done, Tom.
Thank you vb…much appreciated.
Tom
Tom,
that was very powerful, all the more if it’s non-fiction. It takes a lot to that much of yourself out there. You describe the scene beautifully, and the comparisons to the Dying Gaul was masterful.
Thanks David….yep it’s true…it’s non-fiction.
I am sorry for your loss. May you find comfort.
The theme of your piece (two being one) is the one that I thought of at first, but I went with something easier.
Well done.
Abraham,
Didn’t see you this week….I’ll have to go look for your link.
Thanks man.
Tom
if everyone had someone to whom they could speak like that, we would have a much happier world. well done.
Rich,
It sure would be a better place…Thank you.
Tom